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courtesan and monk,
sleeping under one roof together,
moon in a field of clover

ah but seasons never stay
soon gold and red falling

first snowflakes -
my outstretched hand
receiving
[Verse 1 © Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille) Verses 2&3 © gillena cox 2018]


Blog hopping today with

Carpe Diem
#1529 Together ... (Tan Renga Challenge)
Chèvrefeuille prompts us to Tan Renga given a Basho Haiku

courtesan and monk,
sleeping under one roof together,
moon in a field of clover
© Basho (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)

ah but seasons never stay
soon gold and red falling

first snowflakes -
my outstretched hand
receiving
© gillena cox 2018


AND


Poets United Midweek Motif ~ Winter

ah but seasons never stay
soon gold and red falling

first snowflakes -
my outstretched hand
receiving
© gillena cox 2018


REVISIT
24 October 2015
24 October 2013
24 October 2011
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17 comments:

  1. Susan6:56 PM

    Oh! May we keep them all? or is this a trail of revision? I like the leaves transforming into snowflakes as seasons turn, maid and monk as yin/yang. I like how that line "seasons never stay" recalls Frost's "Nothing Gold Can Stay," putting it in the natural turn of seasons. I like the hand receiving. ( I am glad you are safe and well after all the weather has passed through!)

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  2. rallentanda7:26 PM

    Sentiments echoed. Glad you are OK. Hand receiving blessings.

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  3. Old Egg8:42 PM

    I must confess I was surprised you wrote about the four seasons Gillena when you only have two (Dry and Wet) with hurricanes thrown in for good measure! This is like the Northern Territory in Australia.

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  4. Sherry Blue Sky11:31 PM

    Very beautiful, all!

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  5. Kim M. Russell3:21 AM

    Very nicely done, Gillena!

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  6. Anmol (HA)6:58 AM

    Your words compliment Basho's haiku so well. Seasons that never stay bring about a philosophical aspect to it — I loved the image of outstretched hands receiving the first of the snowflakes. <3

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  7. Gillena Cox11:16 AM

    Susan thanks for dropping by.
    They are all keepers. I wanted readers to understand the process and the form, that of Tan Renga; where the two end verses responded and followed the first, which is a Basho haiku.

    Thanks for your appreciation

    much love...

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  8. Gillena Cox11:17 AM

    Thanks for your appreciation Rall

    much love...

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  9. Gillena Cox11:19 AM

    Thanks for your appreciation Robin. Yes, here in T&T ours are The Dry Season and The Rainy Season. I had to draw on vacation memories to write my Tan Renga response.


    much love...

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  10. Gillena Cox11:20 AM

    Thanks for dropping by Sherry

    much love...

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  11. Gillena Cox11:20 AM

    Thanks for dropping by Kim

    much love...

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  12. Gillena Cox11:21 AM

    Thanks for your appreciation Anmol

    much love...

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  13. Amit Agarwal11:41 AM

    Awesome amalgamation, Gillena:) Loved it:)

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    1. Gillena Cox9:49 PM

      Thanks for dropping by Amit

      Much love...

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  14. Adelaide10:29 AM

    Wonderful collaboration. Basho would be pleased.

    Adelaide

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    1. Gillena Cox9:50 PM

      Thanks for your appreciation Adelaide

      Much love...

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  15. Chèvrefeuille3:15 PM

    Very nice post Gillena. I am glad to know you are okay.

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