Friday, July 11, 2014

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TAKE 1
this pelting rain beads
its cadence on my roof
song of the morning


TAKE 2
the pelting rain
beading its cadence on my roof
song of this morning


TAKE 3
the pelting rain beads
its cadence on my roof
song of this morning


TAKE 4
this pelting rain beads
its cadence to my roof
song of morning light


TAKE 5
this pelting rain
beads its cadence on my roof
morning courses in


this pelting rain
beads its cadence on my roof -
morning courses in

-- gillena cox



Revisit
cadence
gentle rain
unfurling



I am blog hopping today at
Recuerda Mi Corazon haiku my heart "'morning rain"



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42 Comments:

Blogger Mark M. Redfearn said...

I really like the image of rain beading its cadence to a roof--a tin roof, I imagine.

Frog and Raven

11:19 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks yes; Mark here we say 'galvanize roofs'

much love...

11:24 AM  
Anonymous Reading Pleasure said...

pelting rain
beads cadence on roof
morning song

Brilliantly done, Gillena.

11:36 AM  
Blogger judie said...

It only took one Take for me to hear that morning rain. I love rainy mornings....
and afternoons....
and evenings....
and thunder at midnight.
Nice one!

11:53 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for sharing your take Celestine

much love...

12:04 PM  
Blogger Lea said...

I loved each one of these takes Gillena! A film in the making, I can see the images oh so clearly and hear them too!

12:04 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Judie, happy you dropped in

much love...

12:05 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation Lea

much love...

12:05 PM  
Blogger Faye said...

Lovely illustration to go with all of the various versions of your poem.

12:36 PM  
Blogger payal agarwal said...

Brilliant! :)

1:06 PM  
Blogger Linda K said...

I like the image of your beautiful haiku (s). Love how you shared your play with the wording too. I love the last one:)

1:08 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Fay

much love...

1:29 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thank you Payal

much love...

1:29 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Linda

much love...

1:30 PM  
Blogger Valerie-Jael said...

A wonderful post! Valerie

1:53 PM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

i love the sound of the rain on the roof...or on an old pot in the yard....like drums...rhythm of the storm....

2:27 PM  
Blogger Julie Huston said...

Hi, you are invited to share this here: http://kittypartay.blogspot.com/2014/07/feline-art-friday-4.html

2:27 PM  
Blogger Lorraine Renaud said...

yes such a calming soothing effect any way you write lovely Gillena

2:38 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Valerie

much love...

3:25 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped by Brian

much love...

3:26 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in and inviting me to share Julie


much love

3:27 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Lorraine

much love...

3:28 PM  
Blogger Leovi said...

I love your beautiful shower of pearls

3:53 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Leovi,

much love...

3:55 PM  
Blogger gma said...

Lovely words Gillena definitely a morning song.

4:01 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Gemma

much love...

4:39 PM  
Blogger Giggles said...

This is such a fun piece!! Have a great week!

Hugs Giggles

4:50 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Giggles

much love...

4:53 PM  
Blogger Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Rainy mornings are somehow soothing, at least sometimes!

7:54 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Surely, thanks for dropping in Maggie

much love...

11:01 AM  
Blogger carol l mckenna said...

Creative post and haiku for HMH ~ thanks, ^_^

artmusedog and carol (A Creative Harbor)

11:31 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Carol

much love...

11:58 AM  
Blogger bellefrogworks said...

So much fun to share your play with words - love the word images and the visual image as well.

12:13 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Belle

much love...

12:57 PM  
Blogger rebecca said...

YES to morning coursing in!

10:23 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Maggie

much love...

5:53 AM  
Blogger denthe said...

Very creative all those takes :-)

8:52 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Denthe

much love...

12:06 PM  
Blogger Anne Jeffries said...

Well done. The subtle changes make such a difference.

3:28 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Anne

Much love...

7:11 PM  
Blogger Julie Huston said...

Thank you for linking up to Feline Art Friday, hope to see you back soon:
http://kittypartay.blogspot.com/2014/07/feline-art-friday-5.html

6:10 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for inviting me Julie

much love...

10:22 AM  

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