Friday, July 11, 2014

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TAKE 1
this pelting rain beads
its cadence on my roof
song of the morning


TAKE 2
the pelting rain
beading its cadence on my roof
song of this morning


TAKE 3
the pelting rain beads
its cadence on my roof
song of this morning


TAKE 4
this pelting rain beads
its cadence to my roof
song of morning light


TAKE 5
this pelting rain
beads its cadence on my roof
morning courses in


this pelting rain
beads its cadence on my roof -
morning courses in

-- gillena cox



Revisit
cadence
gentle rain
unfurling



I am blog hopping today at
Recuerda Mi Corazon haiku my heart "'morning rain"



PP F: Week 18, Year 4

43 comments:

Mark M. Redfearn said...

I really like the image of rain beading its cadence to a roof--a tin roof, I imagine.

Frog and Raven

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks yes; Mark here we say 'galvanize roofs'

much love...

Reading Pleasure said...

pelting rain
beads cadence on roof
morning song

Brilliantly done, Gillena.

judie said...

It only took one Take for me to hear that morning rain. I love rainy mornings....
and afternoons....
and evenings....
and thunder at midnight.
Nice one!

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for sharing your take Celestine

much love...

Lea said...

I loved each one of these takes Gillena! A film in the making, I can see the images oh so clearly and hear them too!

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Judie, happy you dropped in

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation Lea

much love...

Faye said...

Lovely illustration to go with all of the various versions of your poem.

payal agarwal said...

Brilliant! :)

Linda K said...

I like the image of your beautiful haiku (s). Love how you shared your play with the wording too. I love the last one:)

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Fay

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thank you Payal

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Linda

much love...

Valerie-Jael said...

A wonderful post! Valerie

Brian Miller said...

i love the sound of the rain on the roof...or on an old pot in the yard....like drums...rhythm of the storm....

Julie Huston said...

Hi, you are invited to share this here: http://kittypartay.blogspot.com/2014/07/feline-art-friday-4.html

Lorraine Renaud said...

yes such a calming soothing effect any way you write lovely Gillena

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Valerie

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped by Brian

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in and inviting me to share Julie


much love

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Lorraine

much love...

Leovi said...

I love your beautiful shower of pearls

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Leovi,

much love...

gma said...

Lovely words Gillena definitely a morning song.

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Gemma

much love...

Giggles said...

This is such a fun piece!! Have a great week!

Hugs Giggles

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Giggles

much love...

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Rainy mornings are somehow soothing, at least sometimes!

Gillena Cox said...

Surely, thanks for dropping in Maggie

much love...

carol l mckenna said...

Creative post and haiku for HMH ~ thanks, ^_^

artmusedog and carol (A Creative Harbor)

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Carol

much love...

bellefrogworks said...

So much fun to share your play with words - love the word images and the visual image as well.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Belle

much love...

rebecca said...

YES to morning coursing in!

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Maggie

much love...

denthe said...

Very creative all those takes :-)

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Denthe

much love...

Anne Jeffries said...

Well done. The subtle changes make such a difference.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Anne

Much love...

Julie Huston said...

Thank you for linking up to Feline Art Friday, hope to see you back soon:
http://kittypartay.blogspot.com/2014/07/feline-art-friday-5.html

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for inviting me Julie

much love...

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