Monday, August 10, 2015

1720

image courtesy Carpe Diem



setting sun
hope is the reward of those
to slumber

© gillena cox



blog hopping today at
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#794 Hymn to the Aten (CD Distillation)


The goal of the Carpe Diem Distillation is to write/compose a haiku or tanka inspired on a longer poem given, today that's the "Hymn to the Aten", but not an inspired haiku or tanka as we mostly do here. You have to "distil" the haiku or tanka from the longer poem.

Pharaoh Amenhotep IV {Akhenaten) came to the throne in c. 1370 B-C. to reign as co-regent with his father Amenhotep III (c. 1397-1360 B.C.). He attempted a religious revolution in which faith was focused on one god - Aten (the solar disk).

[excerpt from The Great Hymn to Aten] courtesy Carpe Diem
When you set in western lightland,
Earth is in darkness as if in death;
One sleeps in chambers, heads covered,
One eye does not see another.
Were they robbed of their goods,
That are under their heads,
People would not remark it.
Every lion comes from its den,
All the serpents bite;
Darkness hovers, earth is silent,
As their maker rests in lightland

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12 Comments:

Blogger Kristjaan Panneman said...

A beautiful distillation from Hymn for the Aten ... nice haiku with the essence of that part of the Hymn you have chosen. Thank you.

8:06 PM  
Blogger Lorraine Renaud said...

wow Gillena you never cease to amaze me....

4:08 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thank you Kristjaan

much love...

8:43 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Lorraine

much love...

8:44 AM  
Blogger Georgia Koch said...

A wonderful distillation ..

9:38 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Georgia

Much love...

6:50 PM  
Anonymous jazzytower said...

Nicely done Gillena

8:25 PM  
Blogger Magyar said...

Nifty Gillena !

9:22 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped by Jazzy

Much love...

3:09 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Magyar

Much love...

3:10 AM  
Blogger Jim said...

Nice distillation, Gillena. I liked the original too.
Too bad about Mr. Linky at 'Tuesday" with the Toads. Your readers and friends are missing out. Have you tried it today? Some are getting listed.
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2:11 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Hi Jim thanks for dropping in. i will try the linky again at "toads" see what happens

much love...

7:30 AM  

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