Monday, November 04, 2013

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river stones
caressed by flowing water
pale moon shines
--Becca Givens

bare feet turned backward douens
dance under the silk cotton tree
--gillena cox

Linking today to Carpe Diem Tan Renga: “River Stones” AND Sunday Scribblings: “Fable”

revisit "river 2010"

51 DAYS TO CHRISTMAS

34 comments:

Reading Pleasure said...

I like this so much!

Lou Lohman said...

I am going to have to try my hand at Tan Renga - often times, when writing Haiku I find myself with more to say than I can cover in those 17 syllables - two more lines of 7 syllables each would give me so much more room to play.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Celestine, glad you dropped in

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Lou definitely, then you have 2 genres to work with 'The Tanka' a 5-lined poem; and the Tan Renga where the the poemis presented with a link or shift in 2 sections


much love...

Anonymous said...

Gillenan -- I like the direction you moved with your completion. Thank you for sharing! :)

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Becca


much love...

Carol L McKenna said...

Love the feel of the completion ~ can feel my feet dancing ~ carol, xxx

Anonymous said...

beautiful, the dance. under the silk cotton tree:)

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation Carol


much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Angie, happy you dropped in



much love...

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

What a dance that must be!

The Sands Remember

Kristjaan Panneman said...

Good day Lou, maybe you can visit Carpe Diem Haiku Kai there you will find a warm haiku-family and this month it's all about Tan Renga. You're so welcome ...

Kristjaan Panneman said...

You've made this Tan Renga complete in a wonderful way Gillena ... a very nice scenery unfolds.

WabiSabi said...

Thank you for the link to the meaning of douens . I enjoy learning customs, myths and legends from other cultures.

Sun said...

i did not know about this legend - thanks for sharing and wonderful completion. ☺

Leslie said...

The moon and the river a perfect place for dancing.
Delightful

Anonymous said...

A lovely Renga and I learned a new word - thank you :)

Rover Stones

Sumana Roy said...

a beautiful completion giving it a fairy tale touch... :)

oldegg said...

I have got so comfortable with the normal 5/7/5 Haiku format that I really must get out of the rut and experiment a bit more. This I why I like visiting your blog to be inspired a little. Let's see how far you can push Old Egg.

Gillena Cox said...

MMT thanks for stopping by and leaving a link, i visited


much love

Gillena Cox said...

Kristjaan thanks for your appreciation


much love

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you stopped by Wabisabi


much love

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you stopped by Sun


much love

Gillena Cox said...

thanks for your appreciation Leslie


much love

Gillena Cox said...

JRB Happy you stopped by

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

thanks for your appreciation Sumana


much love...

Gillena Cox said...

humble bow Old Egg, always happy at your stop over

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

JRB going to visit, thanks for leaving your link


much love...

Lorraine said...

Wow you and Becca are so talented I can see, yet I don't how...

Gillena Cox said...

Lorraine happy you dropped in


much love...

Kendall Thorman said...

Fun! Well done.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation Kendall


much love...


Anonymous said...

Lovely and thanks for the explanation, too!

Gillena Cox said...


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happy you stopped by

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