Wednesday, June 18, 2014

1457



see! across the street
a pomerac tree laden
ants eat fallen fruit

~every gust of wind rife with cliches~

i sashay my hips
knocking at his door to fetch
a cup of sugar

--gillena cox




i am blog hopping today at Poetry Jam the prompt is "bridge" i chose option #5 - puente

46 comments:

Gabriella said...

Nice that you tried the puente, Gillena! Hope you get that cup of sugar, and maybe an invitation to coffee too.

umang said...

Hats off for attempting the puente! Well penned!

Björn Rudberg said...

oh yes.. there is always a good reason to fetch a cup of sugar

rallentanda said...

Ha I like this one. Sashaying the hips as a prelude to borrowing a cup of sugar. Good luck! Rife wirh
cliches is good too.

alan1704 said...

nicely done, and great use of the prompt.

Arushi Ahuja said...

a great job done to the puente!!

Brian Miller said...

oh my....me thinks you might come away with more than sugar....smiles....great job on the form....

Mary said...

Sometimes one can be thankful one is in need of sugar. Smiles.

Sumana Roy said...

great use of the form...and the last stanza made me smile... :)

Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) thank you for stopping by Gabriella

Much Love…

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Umang

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Bjorn

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) thank you for your appreciation Rallentanda

Much Love…

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Alan

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Arushi

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Brian


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Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you stopped by Mary


Much Love…

Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Sumana


Much Love…

Lorraine Renaud said...

This tastes absolutely delightful, you deserve it all dear Gillena

Laurie Kolp said...

A wonderful puente!

Helen said...

~ perfect ~

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Lorraine

much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Laurie


much love...

Gillena Cox said...

glad you stopped by Helen

much love...

Donna Smith said...

The ants just have no idea what's going on across the street!

Gillena Cox said...

◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Donna


Much Love…

Sherry Blue Sky said...

You worked the form to perfection! Loved the sashaying of the hips, smiles. Way to borrow sugar!

Peggy said...

Lovely puente form. And I just love the word shashay--had not thought of it in a long time. Great image with the ripe fruit.

SaraV said...

Gillena you totally nailed this form! Love that third stanza, made me laugh out loud! Absolutely wonderful :-D

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Sherry

Much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thank you for your appreciation Peggy

Much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Glad you dropped in Sara

Much love...

Madwoman said...

Oh, kind of a sassy one--love it!

Arathi Harihar said...

looks like that sugar is going to be too sweet..smiles..very nice Gillena:)

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you visited Madwoman

Much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Arathi

Much love..

Anonymous said...

Moving from a beautiful moment to a winking, knowing moment - each part of this poem is beautiful. I tip my hat to you! Loving this puente poem.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation blogit

Much love...

Wendy Bourke said...

A delightful Puente - with just a dash of sensuality.

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Wendy, happy you stopped by

much love...

Thomas Olivera said...

it reminds me of the sweet times

Bastet said...

What a beautiful bridge you've written here, a great job!

Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Thomas

Much love...

Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Bastet

Much love...

mrs-minerva said...

Very nice use of the puente form! It was impossible not to smile when reading that last stanza. Lovely!

Gillena Cox said...

Glad i made you smile mrs-minerva

Much love...