Wednesday, June 18, 2014

1457



see! across the street
a pomerac tree laden
ants eat fallen fruit

~every gust of wind rife with cliches~

i sashay my hips
knocking at his door to fetch
a cup of sugar

--gillena cox




i am blog hopping today at Poetry Jam the prompt is "bridge" i chose option #5 - puente

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46 Comments:

Blogger Gabriella said...

Nice that you tried the puente, Gillena! Hope you get that cup of sugar, and maybe an invitation to coffee too.

3:00 AM  
Anonymous umang said...

Hats off for attempting the puente! Well penned!

4:27 AM  
Blogger Björn Rudberg said...

oh yes.. there is always a good reason to fetch a cup of sugar

4:52 AM  
Blogger rallentanda said...

Ha I like this one. Sashaying the hips as a prelude to borrowing a cup of sugar. Good luck! Rife wirh
cliches is good too.

4:55 AM  
Blogger alan1704 said...

nicely done, and great use of the prompt.

5:04 AM  
Anonymous Arushi Ahuja said...

a great job done to the puente!!

6:25 AM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

oh my....me thinks you might come away with more than sugar....smiles....great job on the form....

7:14 AM  
Blogger Mary said...

Sometimes one can be thankful one is in need of sugar. Smiles.

7:15 AM  
Blogger Sumana Roy said...

great use of the form...and the last stanza made me smile... :)

7:45 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) thank you for stopping by Gabriella

Much Love…

7:46 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Umang

much love...

7:47 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Bjorn

much love...

7:48 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) thank you for your appreciation Rallentanda

Much Love…

7:49 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Alan

much love...

7:49 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Arushi

much love...

7:50 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Brian


Much Love…

7:51 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you stopped by Mary


Much Love…

7:51 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

(◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Sumana


Much Love…

7:52 AM  
Blogger Lorraine Renaud said...

This tastes absolutely delightful, you deserve it all dear Gillena

8:34 AM  
Blogger Laurie Kolp said...

A wonderful puente!

8:37 AM  
Blogger Helen said...

~ perfect ~

9:21 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for dropping in Lorraine

much love...

11:36 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Laurie


much love...

11:36 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

glad you stopped by Helen

much love...

11:38 AM  
Blogger Donna Smith said...

The ants just have no idea what's going on across the street!

11:38 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

◕‿◕。) Happy you dropped in Donna


Much Love…

11:43 AM  
Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

You worked the form to perfection! Loved the sashaying of the hips, smiles. Way to borrow sugar!

3:25 PM  
Blogger Peggy said...

Lovely puente form. And I just love the word shashay--had not thought of it in a long time. Great image with the ripe fruit.

7:27 PM  
Blogger SaraV said...

Gillena you totally nailed this form! Love that third stanza, made me laugh out loud! Absolutely wonderful :-D

8:07 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Sherry

Much love...

8:54 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thank you for your appreciation Peggy

Much love...

8:56 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Glad you dropped in Sara

Much love...

8:57 PM  
Anonymous Madwoman said...

Oh, kind of a sassy one--love it!

1:48 AM  
Blogger Arathi Harihar said...

looks like that sugar is going to be too sweet..smiles..very nice Gillena:)

2:18 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you visited Madwoman

Much love...

7:07 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Arathi

Much love..

7:08 AM  
OpenID blogitorloseit.com said...

Moving from a beautiful moment to a winking, knowing moment - each part of this poem is beautiful. I tip my hat to you! Loving this puente poem.

6:22 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks for your appreciation blogit

Much love...

2:19 AM  
Blogger Wendy Bourke said...

A delightful Puente - with just a dash of sensuality.

8:14 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Wendy, happy you stopped by

much love...

7:54 AM  
Anonymous Thomas Olivera said...

it reminds me of the sweet times

3:53 PM  
Blogger Bastet said...

What a beautiful bridge you've written here, a great job!

5:09 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Happy you dropped in Thomas

Much love...

5:08 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Thanks Bastet

Much love...

5:08 AM  
Blogger mrs-minerva said...

Very nice use of the puente form! It was impossible not to smile when reading that last stanza. Lovely!

10:31 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Glad i made you smile mrs-minerva

Much love...

7:49 PM  

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