1.
the New Year shines
through the eyes of an old man -
Cherry blossoms
2.
he watches
Cherry Blossoms at New Year -
the old man
© gillena cox
[image from Pixaby]
[given haiku]
even an old man
has New Year’s eyes…
cherry blossoms
© Kobayashi Issa (Tr. David G. Lanoue)
Carpe Diem
Weekend Meditation #85 Photo-shopping Haiku (2) Cherry Blossom
REVISIT
21 May 2017
21 May 2015
21 May 2013
10 comments:
I can't choose between your photo-shopped versions, Gillena, I enjoyed both!
Thanks for dropping by Kim
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Very lovely, Gillena! I like the shining eyes in #1 :)
Thanks for your appreciation Lynn
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Really nicely done in both. namaste
Thanks for your appreciation Janice
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Gillena, I prefer your versions over the translated version of Issa's. The word "Even" in that version gives the reader an opinion, rather than just describing an image. Every translator will probably have a different version.
Adelaide
Thank you for your appreciation Adelaide
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Nice touch, both very subtle.
Thanks for dropping by Ken
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