Saturday, November 03, 2012

1045

Defining Haiku here at Lunch Break that's 30 days, November 1st - 30th of haiku features

The haiku in today's haiga(illustrated haiku)

crossing the street
the day moon
on my right

--gillena cox

Today's note syllables

crossing the street/the day moon/on my right = 10 syllables

Present day writers of haiku in English agree; stay within 17syllables, or you cross over into another genre.
In English hai.ku = 2 syllables; in Japanese ha.i.ku = 3 syllables


Today's tag

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I invite you to share some of your syllables expertise with me


Thank you-- Magyar for

stepping from the form
this pattern constricts our minds
a model changes


locking in
rules can harm the thought
think beyond


this fence
we leap across
new field



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6 Comments:

Blogger Magyar said...

__I havn't achieved a level that would allow me to say... what I feel the forms of English language haiku/senryu should be.
__5-7-5, 3-5-3, one line, two lines, three... I simply allow my thoughts to 'fall out...' within that 17 syllable limit; right or wrong, minimal words. Others can be critical.


stepping from the form
this pattern constricts our minds
a model changes

locking in
rules can harm the thought
think beyond

this fence
we leap across
new field

__These three senryu reach, I hope, the same point. Right form, or wrong... is a matter of so many differing opinions.

Best wishes, always. _m


8:48 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Doug thank you for your impressions and your haiku sharings


much love...

9:09 PM  
Blogger Lorraine said...

Well done Gillena :)

2:26 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

glad you stopped by Lorraine


much love...

9:51 AM  
Blogger anthonynorth said...

Nice one. I'm a devil for not sticking to forms normally, but for some reason I stick to 17 syllables. I MUST rebel :-)

5:52 AM  
Blogger Jim said...

Nice one, Gillena. Your message came through, starting with the white moon in the sky I was envisioning several streets where I might be.

I do appreciate the forms and mostly I use them. My idol poet, Ted Kooser (Nebraska Poet Laureate and U/N prof) says to try to keep the articles (a, an, the, etc) to help the reading flow.

When I need more than the 14 for the Senryƫ (most of my 14'ers are this one) or Haiku then I go to the Tanka (like I did today) for a further message.

9:53 AM  

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