Tuesday, November 06, 2012

1048



Defining Haiku here at Lunch Break that's 30 days, November 1st - 30th of haiku features

The haiku in today's haiga(illustrated haiku)

garbage collectors -
the din interludes sweet songs
of morning birds

--gillena cox

Today's note - kireji

kireji = (cutter or punctuation); the dash or sometimes a semicolon is used in haiku
garbage collectors(dash) = part one
the din interludes sweet songs of morning birds = part two


I invite you to share some of your kireji expertise with me

1
Thank you Vivian for
after the typhoon--
the ocean's shimmering smile
feigning innocence



2
Thank you Bill for showing the use of kire (pause) without punctuation
between the songs
of morning birds
the trash collection



3
Thank you Chelle for
big metal monsters--
cat gets scared and runs under bed
sound of food it is safer



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8 Comments:

Blogger firebird said...

Here's my contribution:

after the typhoon--
the ocean's shimmering smile
feigning innocence

We are still picking up after Hurricane Sandy, which swept away some of our waterfront here in New York City--but a lot less than the worst predictions! Trying to get back to normal with gasoline shortages, and still lots of people with no power (in the freezing cold!)

Thanks for the education on haiku and haiga--and I love your poems and illustrations--

I still use the traditional haiku form, just because I like the challenge, I guess...

4:22 PM  
Blogger Bill said...

between the songs
of morning birds
the trash collection

Using materials drawn from yours, Gillena. This gives a 2:1 format, a common variation on the 1:2 format you've employed. It also illustrates the effect of doing without punctuation entirely. I think the break remains clear. What do you think?

7:20 PM  
Blogger Lorraine said...

it's so interpretive I would have seen a sweet song among irritatingn things without a single word, you're an excellent artist dear Gillena

6:38 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Vivian thank you for stopping by; hoping things get back to a state of normalcy soon; thank you also for your sharing


much love...

7:12 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Bill thank you for your interpretation of my haiku; surely appreciated

much love...

7:14 AM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

Lorraine humble bow; thank you for your appreciation


much love...

7:15 AM  
Blogger Michelle said...

Not sure if this is right, but Sasha dislikes the sound of the garbage trucks. She usually runs to hide underneath the bed until they pass.


big metal monsters--
cat gets scared and runs under bed
sound of food it is safe

6:42 PM  
Blogger Gillena Cox said...

thank you for sharing Chelle, posting your haiku upfront


much love...

2:21 PM  

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