Defining Haiku here at Lunch Break that's 30 days, November 1st - 30th of haiku features
The haiku in today's haiga(illustrated haiku)
garbage collectors -
the din interludes sweet songs
of morning birds
--gillena cox
Today's note - kireji
kireji = (cutter or punctuation); the dash or sometimes a semicolon is used in haiku
garbage collectors(dash) = part one
the din interludes sweet songs of morning birds = part two
I invite you to share some of your kireji expertise with me
1
Thank you Vivian for
after the typhoon--
the ocean's shimmering smile
feigning innocence
2
Thank you Bill for showing the use of kire (pause) without punctuation
between the songs
of morning birds
the trash collection
3
Thank you Chelle for
big metal monsters--
cat gets scared and runs under bed
sound of food it is safer
Today's tag
8 comments:
Here's my contribution:
after the typhoon--
the ocean's shimmering smile
feigning innocence
We are still picking up after Hurricane Sandy, which swept away some of our waterfront here in New York City--but a lot less than the worst predictions! Trying to get back to normal with gasoline shortages, and still lots of people with no power (in the freezing cold!)
Thanks for the education on haiku and haiga--and I love your poems and illustrations--
I still use the traditional haiku form, just because I like the challenge, I guess...
between the songs
of morning birds
the trash collection
Using materials drawn from yours, Gillena. This gives a 2:1 format, a common variation on the 1:2 format you've employed. It also illustrates the effect of doing without punctuation entirely. I think the break remains clear. What do you think?
it's so interpretive I would have seen a sweet song among irritatingn things without a single word, you're an excellent artist dear Gillena
Vivian thank you for stopping by; hoping things get back to a state of normalcy soon; thank you also for your sharing
much love...
Bill thank you for your interpretation of my haiku; surely appreciated
much love...
Lorraine humble bow; thank you for your appreciation
much love...
Not sure if this is right, but Sasha dislikes the sound of the garbage trucks. She usually runs to hide underneath the bed until they pass.
big metal monsters--
cat gets scared and runs under bed
sound of food it is safe
thank you for sharing Chelle, posting your haiku upfront
much love...
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